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[ Fanfiction ] "Colorless flower". chapter 1. (rating- T)

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Small intro for the start- hey lookie I actualy did the thing! Well, working on it and today presenting part 1 on this fic- counting on comments from all of you, is it any good and worth continuing (not much for now, I know....I mean my style of writting mostly) Constructive criticism welcomed. Kind of side story, focusing our mains. Rated T mostly 'cause of later parts of story. Ships? MAYBE. But rest assured there won't be anything... "too hot" There might be illustrations for this in future~ Enjoy reading, and cheers luvs

EDIT: you c*so check this fanfic on my Wattpad page, with some extras like cover, music (we cant really post links to YT here i think?)~~ and no **** in silly places 'cause of forum auto-censor. https://www.wattpad.com/596251288-colorless-flower-part-1

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Midnight sighed silently, while trying to finish reading instructions of mission from the scroll in his hands. For the 4th time. And again his focus got succesfully disturbed by one silly and pretty annoying melody, hummed by the other boy, sitting next to him on an old, damaged sofa.

Sitting way too close.

Fact that Scarlet was actualy lying upside down on it, with head almost touching the floor, was making it only more disturbing.

Lightning ninja sighed again and fixed reading glasses on his nose. He wasn't sure what was worse- that * song over and over again- or that purring-like sound, comming from his team partner from time to time. Bored Scarlet was usualy breaking all the limits of being annoying and childish.

For almost two years of being a team with him and rest of the squad, Midnight somehow managed to grow kind of a partial immunity for all the * behaviours. Especially of Scarlet, who was never making it easy for him- personal space seemed to be non existing in his view of world, with all the random hugs and other silly things, for the- usually silent- horror of Midnight.

They were always total opposites- listing down from the appearance, characters and behaviour. Scarlet proclaimed many times that he doesn't see them all as a team- but as a family. And he simply loved to be around people. Midnight, on other hand, always liked to spend time alone. Idea of team with 4 other young ninjas was a true issue for him in the past.Looking back at all the stuff he came through with them... he was really amazed that he didn't kill any of them so far.

Especially that Scarlet is still alive and well.

And it was all his fault that Midnight changed so much, that he could now just stop himself from drawing katana at older boy.

But it was true that Midnight started to like them- and even all those bone-crushing group hugs. Taking care of eachother and working as a real team was comming naturally now, even for him. Scarlet was always the "heart" of this "family"- making sure that they all * together. And he was succeeding even in socializing this certain loner.

There was also something else about him, that Midnight could never admitt and what was too * and annoying to even bother thinking too much about.

Sudden sound of Scarlet comming straight from humming into singing aloud, knocked him out of that stream of thoughts. And, to his growing irritation, he realized that he went through whole that wall of text on scroll without getting a single word from it.

He closed eyes shut and took off glasses, cussing in his mind.

"Scarlet." Midnight tried to talk as calmly as he could. "Would you mind to stop. I'm trying to read and remember this."

Other boy smiled at him, with that *ly cute face and dark-red eyes half closed. Midnight frowned, meeting his sight.

"You don't really have to." Scarlet stretched arms while still lying upside down. "I have it all memorized. Leave it to me- I plan, observe and talk- you go cut stuff down. As usual."

Midnight starred for a moment on that trademarked smirk on other boy's face. He decided to leave it without comment.

"But, you know..." Scarlet started again, sitting up properly on sofa. "I actually don't like some things about it. Isn't it weird that they changed plans of whole mission like this? Why they are sending all of us and even some additional people, in last moment, when they said there's just few opponents and they're not even ninjas but simple robbers. Oh, I know- they stole something worth small fortune and being very important on top of everything but...SERIOUSLY! I bet coupon for a week supply of Ichiraku that I would take them all down by myself! And why on earth we're getting split into teams of 2 today- while tomorrow we're going to the same place anyway? And can't we just attack today, all together and fini* quickly? They said they're not so much of a threat, yet planning everything so carefully and detailed as if we were to take part in a war or something. Isn't it a bit weird for you? And all other stuff- like this ruined house here, which they called our base for mission... Where are other teams anyway? Why we don't even know locations of them?"

Scarlet was making a lot of lively hand gestures while all this talking and Midnight was starring on him without a word, wondering if he won't cast any jutsu on him by mistake.

"Right now, you're not making more sense th*l of this complication to our mission." Midnight cut in, while other boy was taking deep breath for another wave of questions and doubts. "You're just paranoid about it. And talking way too much" He gazed coldly at pouting Scarlet. "Or you're just not really happy because not in the same team with Crimson...or Azure."

"Of course not, pft. Who would want to be in a team with Mr Grumpy." Scarlet *ed out tongue. He stood up and rised his head high with a dramatic hand gesture. "Everyone should be honored for getting a chance of being partner of Scarlet Blaze- most amazing, one of a kind, conquerer of a hearts, bringer of nightmares and death for enemies , godly skilled and a true beauty amon-"

Sudden hit of a dusty pillow, thrown by Midnight, finished his show.

"This mission is easy anyway. They just add some extra, unnessesary steps. Nothing new, to be honest. And as you said- we will meet with others tomorrow anyway, so it doesn't really matter."

"I know, but..." Scarlet frowned. He couldn't describe this well but he had some really bad feelings about whole this mission.

"Your 'buts' doesnt matter either. We follow orders. End of discussion."

Scarlet gave up and sighed, sitting back on sofa.

"Well, it's time to get some sleep anyway." Fire-nin yawned wide. "So... mind to move it from my king-sized, heavenly comfortable bed, so I can snore for a bit." Scarlet laughed shortly. This half-ruined, small room in a forgotten house deep in forest, was nothing near 'comfortable'.

"Well...unless you wanna like...share this bed together or so~~" Scarlet tilted head, looking at Midnight with a slyish smile.

Other boy jolted internally for a vision of anyone, ESPECIALLY this goof, in a bed with him.

"Over my dead body!" He growled, stood up and moved to other, a bit bigger bed, in a corner of the room.

"Just joking!" Scarlet laughed. "But it would be warmer for sure. it's rather chilly here~~"

"Drop dead."

"Good night to you too." Scarlet hummed his song again and currled on sofa, trying to find some comfortable position.

Midnight couldn't fall asleep for a long time- irritated of how * it all was. He just hated complications to such silly jobs and all the annoying stuff like 'bad feelings'.

And annoying Scarlet, who was actualy snorring and blabbering even in his sleep- that was also succeeding at keeping him awake.


Whatever was to meet them tomorrow- shall better be prepared for an annoyed, sleep-deprived assassin.

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This post was last edited by Tiami on 2018-06-29 21:51:10.
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On 2018-06-26 06:56:52Show this Author Only
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Ooh, there's a funny chemistry between these two.

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On 2018-06-26 11:59:09Show this Author Only
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I can't stop my delighted giggles! Tiami, you know how to pull off their personalities and relationship, and Dosu is TOTALLY RIGHT!!

But... is this okay? With Azure...


My favourite parts:

"Midnight was staring on him without a word, wondering if he won't cast any jutsu on him by mistake."

"Mr. Grumpy" fufufu

"Everyone should be honored for getting a chance of being partner of Scarlet Blaze- most amazing, one of a kind, conquerer of a hearts, bringer of nightmares and death for enemies , godly skilled and a true beauty amon-"

A beauty among men, AND women, for sure! ♥♥♥

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On 2018-06-26 12:13:12Show this Author Only
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Scarlet's personality reminds me of ADLDICLPNO's protagonist, Idontcare, for some reason.



It's making me laugh. I dunno.




This post was last edited by Do I Care? 2 on 2018-06-26 12:13:23.
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On 2018-06-26 14:16:37Show this Author Only
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Okay, I see you DID write fanfiction. However, I have a gripe with this...there's no spaces between paragraphs! That's all

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Thank you all for taking time to read it! And for kind comments

And I will just say that story will turn more serious in later chapters~~

Relationships between characters~~ hmmm...let's just watch how it will roll in future.

@Do I Care? 2 I gotta catch up on that masterpiece, since I was away from forum for longer time!


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  • Naked Snake On 2018-06-26 14:16:37
  • Okay, I see you DID write fanfiction. However, I have a gripe with this...there's no spaces between paragraphs! That's all

Im sorry, Clay-sensei...I have failed you this time as I am yet a newbie in this kind of creation...I will take your advise and make good use of it next time!

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On 2018-07-21 04:48:37Show this Author Only
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i swear awsome i will leasning to the story more 30 times countue plz

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