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[ Fanfiction ] Fight Against Pain: Defend the Sage (Rating T)

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On 2018-05-04 18:12:00Show this Author OnlyDescending Order
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Tendo smirked and flashed in front of Hinata, surprising the blue haired Hyuuga. The corpse kicked her in the chest and charged forward. He grabbed her by the neck and tossed her into the air. The Deva Path jumped into the air and kicked her down, slamming her back on the ground. She bounced and found Tendo's foot back on her chest, both of them landing down back with a large impact.


"Hinata!"


Naruto watched helplessly as Hinata struggled to stand up, even with the foot on her. She looked at Naruto and smiled, even though her forehead was bleeding.


Tendo flipped off of Hinata and a chakra rod slid from his sleeve. He walked up towards Hinata and plunged it in her chest, making her gasp in pain, and Naruto shout. Midnight saw this and growled. He disappeared in a flash and appeared in front of Tendo and kicked him on the stomach.


Midnight drew his blade and surrounded himself in his lightning armor. The swordsman disappeared in a blink and slashed at Tendo in three consecutive times. Midnight jumped up and slammed his blade down, causing Tendo to bounce up. The Raiton swordsman gathered chakra into his hand and made a punching motion, launching a lightning spear towards him.


"Get lost, you b@stard!"

The spear pierced through Tendo's chest and out the back. The lightning spear ceased, and Tendo dropped down. Midnight ran back and tried to take off the chakra rod in Hinata's chest.


"Hold on Hinata! I'll get that out of you. Then, we can help out Naruto."

Before he could even grip the rod, he felt something protruding through his chest. He looked down and saw a chakra rod, lodged in his chest. Breeze was healed enough to see her boyfriend be stabbed.


"Midnight-kun!"


The silver-haired gaped and coughed out blood and slumped down. Breeze pushed Azure out of the way and rushed at Tendo, rage in her eyes. "You're gonna pay!" A swirl of chakra began to gather in her hands and she appeared behind Tendo. "Odaama Rasengan!"


Breeze slammed the large chakra attack on Tendo's back, but he disappeared, making her eyes widened. Tendo appeared behind her and he grabbed her by the neck. The fan-user struggled in his grip. The Deva Path glared at her and slid out another chakra rod.


"Know pain." And he stabbed her in the chest, making her arch her back and gasp in pain. Tendo threw her aside, landing next to Midnight. Azure gritted her teeth and created two clones


"Go and tend to Scarlet-kun and Crimson-niisan!" ordering the her two clones.


The two clones nodded and rushed to their respective tasks. Azure charged forward, performing a set of hand seals. "Suiton: Suiryuudan no Jutsu!"


A large pillar of water emerged from behind her and shaped into a serpentine dragon. The water dragon roared and shot to Tendo. the Deva Path titled his head and slapped it, dispersing the water. Azure jumped at Tendo and formed her water whip.


"Take this!"


Azure slammed her whip at Tendo, who caught it, much to her surprise. Tendo gripped the water whip tightly and pulled on it pulling Azure along. Yet again, another chakra rod slid into his unoccupied hand and plunged it into the medic-nin's chest.

"Azure-chan!" shouted out Scarlet


Tendo turned and saw Crimson and Scarlet, the both of them looking quite pised, charging towards him. The brown-haired shinobi waved through hand seals and spat out multiple spheres of lava towards Tendo.


The Deva Path gritted his teeth and jumped back, before flipping away from another. He looked to his left and saw Crimson rearing his fist, covered in rocks. Tendo crossed his arm, as Crimson punched him with his hardened fist.


Tendo was sent flying back, into Scarlet's path. The Genjutsu-user weaved through hand seals and spat out a flame shaped-like a dragon. "Katon: Goryuuka no Jutsu!"


The Puppet Corpse grunted. "Shinra Tensei!" he shouted, dispersing the Katon jutsu with gravity. Scarlet growled and charged forward, a crimson flame on his hand. "You'll pay for hurting her!"


Yahiko's corpse merely backhanded Scarlet, sending him flying right by Crimson. The Taijutsu expert of the group stood up and grabbed a piece of the earth and threw it towards Tendo.


"Drop dead!"

Tendo merely looked at the object, and it exploded into multiple chunks. Crimson punched some of the chunks shooting towards him. He formed the Ram sign, his skin hardened again.


"I should've done this earlier. Hachimon Tonko: Kaimon, Kyuumon, Seimon, Shom0n: Kai!" shouted Crimson.


A bright green light surged out from Crimson's body, his skin turning slightly red, his eyes turning white and his hair raised up. Disappearing in a blur, Crimson charged forward and slammed his fist into Tendo's gut, making him spat out saliva.


Crimson then quickly followed up with an uppercut, sending the Deva Path straight into the air. With a determined glare, he launched himself up to continue his attack.

"Omoto Renge!"


With his large and muscly arms, he bear-hugged Tendo and began spinning in a fast pace. The both of them started descending. Crimson smirked and pile drived the Deva Path right onto ground,both of them bouncing, with the dark-skinned orangenette unharmed.

"Oh, we're just getting started!" announced Crimson


Tendo stood back, ignoring the pain he was somehow how feeling. He stood and cracked his entire skeleton, snapping sounds echoing. Tendo looked at Crimson and made a come hither motion.


"Very well, come and feel pain!"


Crimson smirked and charged at Tendo, who charged as well. The two met in a clash, that caused both of them to be sent flying. The corpse cracked his neck. Crimson cracked his fist and readied himself to fight.




This post was last edited by Naked Snake on 2018-05-04 18:12:00.
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On 2018-05-04 19:26:49Show this Author Only
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A very good fanfic, but, if you don't find, although not trying to be rude, your grammar is quite atrocious, would you like me to rewrite it, making everything make more sense? I will of course credit you, and make adjustments and additions where needed to make it better, I hope you accept my help, and I can make your fanfic very well written indeed

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On 2018-05-04 21:51:06Show this Author Only
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  • ShadowLordZero On 2018-05-04 19:26:49
  • A very good fanfic, but, if you don't find, although not trying to be rude, your grammar is quite atrocious, would you like me to rewrite it, making everything make more sense? I will of course credit you, and make adjustments and additions where needed to make it better, I hope you accept my help, and I can make your fanfic very well written indeed

Alright then, would you kindly cite out some part of this chapter that has atrocious grammar? Although you meant no offense, I feel offended. Because you are the first person to call my grammar atrocious. What's more, I've seen OTHER fanfics with grammar more horrid than mine.






This post was last edited by Naked Snake on 2018-05-04 22:03:11.
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On 2018-05-08 01:59:52Show this Author Only
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the feel when you were worried about Hinata dying, but then she dies anyway and Breeze dancer gets messed up too :(

Why are you killing off my waifus?!

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On 2018-05-08 11:47:07Show this Author Only
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  • AislingDragonfl On 2018-05-08 01:59:52
  • the feel when you were worried about Hinata dying, but then she dies anyway and Breeze dancer gets messed up too :(

    Why are you killing off my waifus?!

Because...suspense?

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